So I just started writing a song and I want to know what you guys think of the last line.
"And I'm standing on the edge ready to fall - from it all
and you don't know it yet
but at the next little threat
I will fall - from it all
while you watch from the edge
As I fall to death"
Critics are appreciated! Just be gentle please.

I am playing my guitar... You should let me send you some music and you put words to it. In box me if ya wanna do somethin like that

Oh... And don't die in the song. Lol

Sounds like a good ending to a song.

@traces: i would appreciate that!!!! But i can't write music just lyrics. I've got the tune in my head and i can sing it that's all. XD and I won't die!

Ok. I make up a lot of stuff. Do you play anything?

I used to play trumpet

@traces: does that count?

Very nice:) I was a lil confused as to what it was about because of the last six words:) I re-read it and thought 'As I fall outta love' would make it clearer:)

@Sammy2: that does make sense. Thanks!