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"Spinning" (by ThatNerdyChick)

 ThatNerdyChick (32)    (30 / F-MF / Virginia)
8-Sep-12 6:19 pm
Don't fall in love-
You'll just get hurt,
And wind up with children
That you can't support.
She'll tell you she loves you,
You'll hold her real tight,
But another day passes
And you're in a fight.
Relationships, struggles,
and becoming one,
You'll end up frustrated
And wish you were done,
But life keeps on going,
The spinning won't stop
And you'll realize too soon
That you cannot get off.
So, please listen now,
I have some advice,
Don't just give it up for
The guys who are nice,
Give it some time,
And give it some thought,
Only marry the person
Who's been through a lot.
And no matter the struggles,
The tears, and the pain,
You'll find you're not standing
Alone in the rain.
His arms wrapped around you,
His lips at your neck,
The world may be spinning
But you're not done yet.
Marriage is life-long,
A pledge to your spouse,
Divorce is the question
Of who gets the house.
It's simple, it's awful,
It's tried and it's true,
Be careful when choosing,
So they'll stick with you....

//so this isn't supposed to be a sophisticated poem just a rhyming blurb of thoughts. Don't take it too seriously as a work of "literature" lol also... this is flipping long o_o I do apologize for that.

 

 



Last edited by ThatNerdyChick; 8-Sep-12 6:24 pm.
 
 
 eprillevine5 
8-Sep-12 6:23 pm
wow!!i like the struggle part!! its a good one.kinda romantic too:D

 

 

 
 
 loulou00 (6)   (33 / F-M / Georgia)
8-Sep-12 6:29 pm
I LOVE THIS! Very nice job! :-)

 

 

 
 
 ThatNerdyChick (32)    (30 / F-MF / Virginia)
8-Sep-12 6:31 pm
@loulou00: aww thanks! lol it was fun to write

 

 

 
 
 SideBurns83 (5)    (41 / M-F / Alabama)
8-Sep-12 6:32 pm
Nice real nice i enjoyed it thoroughly good work

 

 

 
 
 james85 
8-Sep-12 6:32 pm
no need to apologize my friend this is still very good!

 

 

 
 
 ThatNerdyChick (32)    (30 / F-MF / Virginia)
8-Sep-12 6:33 pm
@eprillevine5: Thanks! :) Well, it's sorta my view on love I guess. It *should* be romantic.

 

 

 
 
 ThatNerdyChick (32)    (30 / F-MF / Virginia)
8-Sep-12 6:34 pm
@james85: It just kept writing itself o_o; So that's why it's so long lol

 

 

 
 
 james85 
8-Sep-12 6:50 pm
@ThatNerdyChick: thats a good thing! when something just flows like that its cool it happens to me too :) hope ur well

 

 

 
 
 eprillevine5 
8-Sep-12 7:00 pm
@thatnerdychick hehe welcum;)i like poetry^^

 

 

 
 
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