All Forums >> General >> Stories, Poems & Creative Writing

I wrote a short one this time (by PaulG7719)

 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 6:19 am
So post your prize-winner for us? Pls?
i dont remember it word for word :( its been 4 years. that was the last one i ever wrote. when i get to a computer ill search it and post it. promise!

 

 

 
 
 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 6:22 am
@Mobifren: thank you! im glad you liked it.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (47 / F-M / Florida)
9-Nov-12 6:28 am
as i lay there on the grass, under the shade of an old oak tree, i heard the faint whisper of a woman sobbing. curiosity called to me as i arose to find the source. i happened upon a well and the sobbing seemed to emenate from within. in a panic i grabbed the rope attached to the side and tossed it down. "grab on" i yelled! "thank you" i heard a voice reply. i pulled on the rope but couldnt budge it. i pulled harder and harder, still unable to lift. suddenly i felt a tug. as i struggled to pull, another tug overpowered me and dragged me into the well! as i fell, i saw a light that brightened with the descent. as i passed through the light, i saw you crying. "how did you get into this well honey?" i asked. "well?" you said, face stained with tears. "youre not it in a well paul. youre in a hospital, and youve come back to me!"
This writing was gripping Paul. A testament to what people can experience in real life when they have those "out of body" experiences. Oh how I love

 

 

 
 
 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 6:34 am
@JustMeAndYou77: can you believe i just made it up in about 10 minutes?

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (47 / F-M / Florida)
9-Nov-12 6:35 am
taking those nice mysterious adventures in your stories. You make my mind a journeyer and adventurer!! I may have to shuffle Stephen King down a notch lol And put you right next to Dean Koontz Anyways, thanks again Paul. You have again touched us with your talent :))

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (47 / F-M / Florida)
9-Nov-12 6:41 am
@JustMeAndYou77: can you believe i just made it up in about 10 minutes?
I can believe you could come up with the story. Yes. But, the details and personal realistic emotions and deep thinking applied to it, no. That's where the talent is. To be able to lead my mind into a place that makes me feel what's happening in the story and unlocking so much imagination in my mind and heart is definitely talent. Would have taken me months to piece it all together in a story lmao

 

 

 
 
 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 6:44 am
@JustMeAndYou77: i just showed my ex what you have just said. now, after 6 years of oppressing my writing..... she wants to read the other 2 i posted.
thank you so much sweetheart for your praise! there will be much more to come. love is the inspiration for these writings.

 

 

 
 
 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 7:07 am
@JustMeAndYou77: can you believe i just made it up in about 10 minutes?
I can believe you could come up with the story. Yes. But, the details and personal realistic emotions and deep thinking applied to it, no. That's where the talent is. To be able to lead my mind into a place that makes me feel what's happening in the story and unlocking so much imagination in my mind and heart is definitely talent. Would have taken me months to piece it all together in a story lmao
its responses like this, my dear, that make my heart begin to warm. im glad that not only do i take you on a journey, but that i can give a lesson in doing so. its my ability to articulate what i see in my mind and the creativity i possess that brings you into mind so you can see what i see and feel what i feel. and that is my pleasure and my gift to you and those who read my writing.

 

 

 
 
 JustMeAndYou77 (17)   (47 / F-M / Florida)
9-Nov-12 8:13 am
YES! Sharing the experiences in the story as if it were my own. Having a moral lesson to take back into the real world...absolutely! btw, I am so glad your gf (come on...work it out ) has decided to open herself up to sharing some of your passions with you. It could turn out to benefit the both of you in the future. It can also help to rekindle a the relationship for the both of you. You're already living in the real world with reality on top of you. Share some fantasy, magic, imagination and throw some mystery up in there lol It's just between you two anyhow. Yall have some fun Paul for goodness sake!!

 

 

 
 
 PaulG7719 
9-Nov-12 3:31 pm
@JustMeAndYou77: i wish it were that simple hun. we will never be the same again. wich brought me to this place lol. im in no hurry to get her back or get a new relationship. if it happens it happens. id rather have someone who enjoys my company and wont cheat on me.

 

 

 
 
Quick reply:

[Smilies]

RULES:
  • Be respectful at all times.
  • Be mature and act like an adult.
  • Respect different points of view.
  • Discuss ideas, not specific users.
  • Don't get personal.
  • No profanity.
  • No drama.
  • No thread hijacking.
  • No trolling.
  • No spamming.
  • No soliciting.
  • No duplicate posting.
  • No posting in the wrong section.
  • No posting of contact information.
  • Be welcoming to new users.
Repeated violations of the above will result in increasing temporary bans from the forum and an eventual permanent ban from the site. Basically, just be friendly and neighborly and all will be well.
Similar threads:
Top
Home
Give us feedback!

Login:

* Username:

* Password:

 Remember me


Forgot?