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Give me your opinion. (by Dslaney92)

 Dslaney92 (13)     (32 / M-F / Georgia)
6-Nov-12 6:14 am
Ive been writing poems id like to.turn into songs. But please give me your opinions on this. I know its a bit depressin.


Smoke filled lungs, a drunken haze. I havent slept in 4 days. Ive seen the sunrise and sunset. My soul is torn and i bet, somewhere inside theres a peace. Ohhh but its bitter sweet. I mourn the loss of some close friends. I regret alot of **** ive done. And cant take back some of the ways ive been. My demons seem to have won. I fight myself everyday. Oh some of the things i say. My only love is this cigarette. Burns my lungs but helps me forget. The pain i feel the tears ive cried. Nobody can say i havent tried. I tried.

 

 

 
 
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